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 ## hunting in general
 
-[hiking? sitting in a hunting blind?]
 On rare occasion I do get a tiny amount of flak for the practice of hunting. generally when I'm spending any time socializing with anyone, food is involved. So i *could* return with something like, we just ate meat, so is there a moral issue with doing more of the work myself?
 But I've gone for a gentler approach with some self deprecating humor; i have never successfully harvested any animal, ever. Is it really hunting, or is it paying for a license to wake up before dawn to carry 20 lbs of crap on a glorified hike? I am not, strictly speaking, a hunter. Although capitalism is happy to say I've spent money on products and therefore have earned a sense of community.
 
 [long beat]
 
-Sitting in a blind for hours is depressing. Partially due to sleep deprivation, sure. I hate sitting in silence. But what's the difference doing that in a hunting blind, vs at home, out in public?
+Sitting in a blind for hours is depressing. Partially due to sleep deprivation, sure. in spite of how gorgeous the view is, I hate sitting in silence. But what's the difference doing that in a hunting blind, vs at home, out in public?
 There's nothing to do but think.
 [beat]
 I'm beginning to doubt that deer exist. I've seen them, in person, in the past. Right? I'm pretty sure that was real.